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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pictures illustrate the changes, which have taken place at West
Park
 secondary school from 1950 to 2010.
Firstly
, significant alterations occurred to the farmland, it was redesigned into a sports field in 1980 and
then
 into a
car
park
 in 2010. There was an expansion of the
car
park
 in 2010 and the sport field was placed between the
car
park
 and the
playground
.
Moreover
, substantial changes happened to the houses. They were removed from the map, the
car
park
 and science block taking their place.
Furthermore
, a science block was added to the school building in 1980 and the
playground
 was reduced in size.
However
, the locations of the
playground
 and school were not modified.
In contrast
, the main road remained unchanged throughout the period.
Overall
, farmland and houses disappeared from the map, the
playground
 was abridged, and there were built science blocks,
car
park
Fix the agreement mistake
parks
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 and sports fields.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, car, playground with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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