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Shopping has become a new favorite pastime for the younger generation. Why is this the case? Should we encourage them to develop other hobbies too?

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With the advent of multi-cultural societies and rapid changes being made in lifestyles, people’s choice of spending their free
time
 has changed considerably.
While
 some people opine that adolescence must spend their
time
 following different hobbies others prefer to spend their quality
time
 shopping. I will substantiate the reason for
this
 trend in the following paragraphs. Owing not only to gigantic shopping malls but
also
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 many teenagers are being lured towards shopping culture. First of all, as trade has started to bloom more and more products are being easily made available to the masses.
In addition
 to
this
, either the items are available at a reduced rate or there is competition in the market.
Secondly
, the government has not only reduced the taxes on many imported products but
also
 has increased trade
from
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 foreign countries. For example, my friend is fond of perfumes which he purchases easily from foreign brands which
were
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 not possible earlier.
Furthermore
, shopping centres provide a good place to relax and spend quality
time
.
Although
 shopping culture has many benefits we must encourage other activities for the youth
such
 as jogging, cycling or going to the gym to stay fit and healthy.
Moreover
, developing other hobbies not only inculcates different morals and values it
also
 aggrandizes the responsibilities one
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 as an individual.
In addition
 to
this
, for the holistic development of an individual, it is best if one spends some
time
 reading books or watching a movie. Conclusively, with more and more shopping
plaza
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 being opened the trend
to spend
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free-
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time
 there has considerably increased.
This
 is a positive development as it increases the sales of the product
thus
 a variety of products are easily available in the market
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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