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Getting a promotion is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotions? What other factors influence people to work hard?

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Introduction
In
this
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 modern era, people are attracted to achieving promotions at the workplace and so they tend to labour hard. And I think definitely, it is the most important factor that pushes people to toil harder and harder each day.
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, there are
also
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 a few other reasons that motivate an employee to dedicate themselves to tasks like curiosity to learn more and earn more money.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with, no doubt promotion brings numerous advantages for an employee
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 as the power of decision-making.
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 entices the worker to reach a position, where he needs to just order his fellow employees or even the junior staff.
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, people laboriously struggle day and night to fulfil their dream of becoming a manager or maybe the chairman of a company.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, few
staffs
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 challenge themselves to become better in their work. The urge to know more and become proficient at a skill propels an individual to push their limits and put their heart and soul into their job. Eventually, a person would end up getting promoted.
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, the number performing tirelessly to earn their living, not for the sole reason of getting stimulated to a higher position.
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, some employees strive for extra time to earn extra bread for their families.
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, if in a family of
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 there is only one person who earns, surely that person has to work overtime to feed his family and conform to their necessities.
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, not only the temptation of being in a higher position
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 them a harder workforce but, the passion and money factor
as well
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plays
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 a crucial role.
Conclusion
In conclusion, in my opinion ,
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 promotional attraction, their loyalty towards the company and family boosts an employee to function with the endeavour and benefit all.

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