More and more women go out to work. It is the government's responsibility to subsidise them and provide free staffs and facilities to care for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?
In the modern ,era most housewives work outside to fulfil their dreams and live a better life. Ladies doing jobs for families at that time politics
support
her in caring for children and some facilities. I totally agree with Wrong verb form
supported
this
statement and give some examples in ensuring
paragraph.
First of all, all mothers do jobs and caring for offspring is hard for her. But Verb problem
the concluding
this
problem by the support of the government because if they give some free services like taking care of children during working time and giving medical facilities.Moreover
,young and ambitious mothers can have time for seeking
a job and their own personal fulfilment.As an example,research shows that 60 per cent of ladies really desire to have these types of opportunities, which can provide improvements in the country by having more hardworking employers.
The second main reason is girls live very stressful Change preposition
to seek
life
because of trying to manage jobs and caring for babies. They need good opportunities for living a good life and managing both things. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Furthermore
,it can provide a decline of depreciation in women and lead to increasing
Replace the word
an increase in
of
level happiness in folk.Correct article usage
the of
For instance
,in terms of mother's bliss. This
not only benefits the women but also
boosts the economy as due to
the above-stated reasons many potential women out there don't have a choice to work.
To conclude
,I strongly believe that mothers require the government's support by providing free stuff to take care of their children during mother
working hours because it will give decreasing of depreciation and improvements in the country. Correct your spelling
their
This
step is very positive for ladies and the government too because the employment ratio increases if they provide these services.Submitted by urvipatel606 on
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task response
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic and outlines the main points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas and create a clear and logical flow of information throughout the essay.