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The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graph shows data about the number of adult British
people
 who donate money to charities in the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, donations from the three younger
groups
 of
people
 declined remarkably in 2010 compared to 1990.
In contrast
, donating
people
 went up in the two older
groups
. In
the
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1990
middle aged
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people
 donated more among all
groups
, and in 2010 it is above aged
people
 who donated more.
Firstly
, around 17% of youth between the ages
18
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of 18
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 to 25 donated in 1990 compared to that
of
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about 7% in 2010.
Similarly
, 26-35 aged
people
 declined by around 10% in donations
between
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over
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 the years. More than 40% of 35-50
age
grouped
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people
 who donated in 1990 fell by around 5% in 2010. These are the
people
 who contributed
for
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to
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 more
donation
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donations
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 in 1990. On the other side, older
people
 of
age
groups
 51 to 65 and above 65 are highly interested in donating as their numbers increased by 5% and 3% respectively between 1990 and 2010. 51 to 65
age
people
 account for more donations in 2010, followed by
35
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the 35
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 to 40
age
 group and above 65
age
 grouped
people
 with 35% each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, groups, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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