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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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University
graduates
, Canada (1992-2007) The graph represents the
number
 of university
graduates
 from the
year
 1992 to 2007 in the country
of
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Canada.
Also
, it represents the difference between the male and female
graduates
 during the same.
Firstly
, the
number
 of
graduates
 from 1992
have
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 drastically changed over the years. The
number
 of female
graduates
 in the initial
year
 was around 90 thousand, which gradually increased in the
year
 1995.
Whereas
, the
number
 of male
graduates
initially
were
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 about 70 thousand which
also
 gradually increased in the
year
 1995. There was a downfall in the
number
 of
graduates
 in the
year
 1998.
However
, in the later
years
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 the
number
 of women
graduates
 increased and it reached the highest in 2007 with more than 140,000
graduates
. There was
also
 a decent increase in the
number
 of male
graduates
 by 2007 with more than 90,000
graduates
. But,
overall
 the
number
 of female
graduates
 in Canada
were
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was
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 more than the
number
 of male
graduates
 during that period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, number, year with synonyms.
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