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You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. write a letter to shop manager. in your letter describe the problem with the equipment explain what happened when you phoned the shop say what you would like the manager to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing to let you know that I bought a pressure cooker from your shop almost 2 days ago. When I decided to use apparatus to make some food for my hubby, I found there is an issue at the upper side of the kitchen article. Means its evaporation section had not worked properly. it is
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 essential part to cook delicious food. I am sure you provide a solution
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 when I let you know what happened when I call to shop to sort out the earlier mentioned problem. You know what? Your shop seller behaviour is very poor toward the customer. When I told him about the kitchen accessory problem on the phone, he react like he did not know much about it. Even though, he has not given me a proper time to tell him my queries. He said in
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 bad manner, I have no time, I call you back when I am free and after
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 he does not call me back, while
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 am waiting till today. I would like to tell
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 to sort out my equipment issue or replaced it with a new one. I would suggest him to give proper training to your shopkeepers about equipment’s and tell them how to guide the customers on the phone? Thank you for
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 Tayyab Hussain

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