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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three period and whether they were studying full-time and part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three period and whether they were studying full-time and part-time.
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The bar graph illustrates the information about the British males and females in additional study to full-time or part-time between three decades
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
the
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full-time study is more popular than
part time
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 education for both
men
 and women. It can be observed that
in
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 1970 to 1981, one million males studied full-time and 180000
men
 studied part-time,
whereas
 opposite site , females approximately 800000
was
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studied full-time
however
,
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studied was least that was just 150000.
In contrast
, there was full-time a steady decrease for
men
 during 1980-81 that has been just above 800000,
while
 female enrolment
was slightly risen
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 in the same period. Part-time
studied
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almost
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same
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 of the previous decade.
Furthermore
, full-time education
grown
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 up in 1990 to 1991 which was almost touched 1100 thousand.
In
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opposite
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 side, males
was
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 approximately 900 thousand
into
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this
 decade.
In addition
,
part -time
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part-time
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 education was
same
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the same
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both
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men
 and women that were 200000 respectively throughout the decade.
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