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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs depict the trends of how much
a
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petrol, eatables and
good
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goods
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 are produced by one nation and transmitted to the other nation between the
period
 2000 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be clearly vivid that the total
value
 of
fuel
 falls in the
year
 2002 as compared
the
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 previous span, but after the
year
2002
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 the entire
value
 of
fuel
 increased rapidly over the
period
. Meanwhile, the worth of
fuel
 has fallen slightly.
Whereas
, the export of
food
 has fluctuated considerably. In the
year
 2000, the total
value
 of petrol exported to other nations was 3, 00,000 and it is falling slightly from 50,000 in the
year
 2002 but after
year
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 2002 the
value
 of total exports of
fuel
 rise dramatically and reached
to
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the
nearly
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value
 of 4, 50,000 in the final
year
.
On the other hand
, there was a decline
of
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fuel
 in every
year
 starting from nearly 50,000 in the
year
 2000 to 30,000 in 2002 and slowly it is felled down to 20,000 in 2005. Coming to the meal exported, there is a variation in the
value
 of
food
 exported every
year
 compared to the petrol exports. In 2000, roughly fifteen million
food
 are exported and in 2001 and 2002 it
is
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increased by ten thousand
while
 in 2003 it
was
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decreased to 20000 million and from 2003 the
value
 of eatables exported increased slightly.
Similarly
,
also
value
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 of goods produced is going under fluctuation compared to the
food
 and less
value
 of the good is exported over the
period
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 to crude oil and
food
. In the
period
 2000, 2004 and 2005 roughly only 3000 goods were exported and from 2001 to 2003 there is
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slightly
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 fluctuation.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, value, fuel, year, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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