In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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world

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there are many countries where

people

with advanced degrees are struggling to find employment. I think

this

is because full-time employment is no longer the cornerstone of modern economies. Universities need to

re-structure

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study

options in order to keep abreast of

this

development.

People

often declare that there is no

work around

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anymore. In fact, there is plenty of work. Casual, on-call, contract, part-time and temporary positions have proliferated in recent years. What is much rarer now is permanent employment, meaning positions with a long-term contract, benefits, stability, internal promotion and skills development organised by employers. The problem is that the university education system was designed for an employment-centred economy.

People

would dedicate anything from five to seven years to diligent

study

in order to get a guaranteed career

at the end

of it. There is no guarantee anymore. The solution is for university education to accommodate new working arrangements.

Study

options need to be broken down into shorter “booster” qualifications taken on an as-needed basis with more part-time, evening and distance options. A more realistic scenario now is for workers to balance two separate income streams

while

studying on the side – perhaps for the length of their working life – rather than studying full-time for six years and

then

working full-time until retirement. The post-employment economy is only a problem for

people

who are not prepared for it.

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many of these

people

are highly-qualified graduates who are the product of an antiquated education system. Revamping university

study

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should resolve

this

issue.

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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

Include an introduction and conclusion

People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give a presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really very important? Give reasons. Some people say that public speaking should be taught at school. Do you agree or disagree?

Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?