Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Wild

animals

, which are on the verge of extinction, are preserved in zoos and

also

protected by applying strict laws.

Although

this

protection for rare species is supported by few people, there are others

along with

me who believe that not only endangered species but

also

all wild

animals

must be preserved.

This

essay will discuss both the standpoints and justify my viewpoint. The most compelling argument to endorse the opinion of those who do not support the idea

to preserve

Change preposition

of preserving

show examples

all wild

animals

due

to

Change preposition

that

show examples

requires a large amount of money.

Although

it is difficult

that

Change preposition

to

show examples

maintaining

Wrong verb form

maintain

show examples

animals

in zoos in order to save them from extinction is expensive.

For instance

, Melbourne

zoo

Capitalize word

Zoo

show examples

, one of the famous zoos in Australia, spends a lot of money to feed all the

animals

which

Correct word choice

that

show examples

they are protecting. Consider if they have to preserve all the wild

animals

,

this

budget would increase to the point where it could affect

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

human needs.

Therefore

, these funds should be allocated for humanitarian issues, as many

third world

Add a hyphen

third-world

show examples

countries are still struggling against starvation and deadly diseases.

However

, others think that all wild

animals

must be protected. The main reason behind

this

view is that all of the wild

animals

play an important role in the ecosystem. Should there be one of these species extinct,

then

the ecosystem would be unbalanced and it might have a serious effect on the environment.

Moreover

, the existence of these wild

animals

is beneficial for human beings.

For instance

, scientists have found that some wild

animals

could be used as a medical treatment,

such

as the blood of a snake which can be used to heal skin diseases.

Furthermore

, all wild

animals

are important and should be equally protected. In conclusion, we should save every wild animal

that is

still present in the world. As

,

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

every animal in one way or another is important to maintain balance in

ecosystem

Add an article

the ecosystem

show examples

, all should be protected.