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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graphs give information about how much money the British people spent on fast food weekly and the uses of hamburgers, pizza and fish and chips over a period of 20 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the high and average income groups are
exppenditure
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expenditure
expenditures
 on hamburgers
most
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,
while
 the
low income
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low-income
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 people spent more on fish and chips.
However
, burgers and pizza have
been
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significantly increased over that time.
According to
 the bar graph, high and middle-income classes spend on hamburgers around 42, and 34
pence
/
person
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per person
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, respectively,
whereas
 the low economic level
spend
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 less
than15
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than 15
pence
 on the same type of junk food. For fish and chips, the
mid-classe
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mid-class
mid-classes
 of income expend more than other groups ( 25
pence
 per person),
in contrast
, the rich and poor people
spending
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spent
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 almost the same about 19
pence
. As for the
last
 type of fast food (pizza)
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pence with synonyms.
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