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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, in many nations, females are employed
full-time
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 jobs.
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, it is more logical and equal to
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household
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 chores for
both
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men
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 and
women
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. I completely agree with
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 viewpoint, and in
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 essay, I will propose my opinion and give examples. The first reason for my belief is that sharing
housework
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 might reduce less burden on a single person, especially
women
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 who
work
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 full-time. It is unfair that the wife has to do
household
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work
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while
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 working full-time because
both
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tasks
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 are complex and time-consuming. Since
women
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 perform full-time jobs because their physical abilities are limited,
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they cannot finish all
tasks
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 with good results. If husbands
share
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 ordinary
work
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 with their partners,
women
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 will have more time to care for their children and could be more successful in their careers.
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 to dividing domestic
work
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, working couples could eliminate conflict in
family
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the family
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. When
both
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 husband and wife contribute to
household
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work
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, no one complains that one is doing more
work
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 than another.
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 leads to having a happy family and a prosperous life.
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while
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a women
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women
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woman
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do
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does
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 all
tasks
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,
such
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 as cleaning the house, doing
a
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laundry and taking care of children, she might feel irritated with her husband,
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 leading to a quarrel.
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, doing
housework
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 together will
be built
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 up teamwork between wife and husband. Some people may argue that
housework
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 is a
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women's
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woman's
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 job. It is a prejudice from the early days when
men
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 used to
work
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while
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women
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 spent all their day doing
household
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 chores. But now, females have careers, so it is vital to
share
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 domestic
tasks
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.
Men
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 should
share
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housework
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 because they are part of the family. In conclusion, sharing
household
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 duties with each other is responsible for
both
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men
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 and
women
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. It is an excellent initiative to reduce the pressure of doing
housework
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 individually and lower the chances of conflict between family members.
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