Avoiding preventable illness is the responsibility of individuals and their families, not governments.
Some
people
believed
that Wrong verb form
believe
health
is their responsibility
while
on the other hand
, many people
believe that taking care of themselves and their family's health
by avoiding preventable illness is not their responsibility
, but the government
's responsibilities
to control using regulation and it is wrong.
When preventable illnesses Fix the agreement mistake
responsibility
such
as the global pandemic that is
happening right now like COVID-19, the Government
has already released some rules
and regulations for people
to avoid getting infected. There are some rules
such
as social distancing, wearing masks, not gather
with many Wrong verb form
gathering
people
, even
the Correct word choice
and even
last
option locks down. The government
already tried their best to prevent the spreading of the viruses
, but it depends on the people
themselves. There are some reasons why it is an individual’s responsibility
. If people
obey the rules
and regulations, the chain of the virus to spread
will be reduced. Sadly, many people
still do not care about the rules
that the government
has already made. They didn’t even know the regulation
to prevent the Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
spread
of viruses
.
Individual health
also
affected by many factors, including the lifestyle of the individual. An individual who is a couch potato (the one who always lying down in their bed) and Add a missing verb
is also
having
a lack of exercise or a poor diet is more likely to become sick than an individual who makes healthier lifestyle choices Wrong verb form
has
such
as routinely do
some exercise like yoga, etc.
Wrong verb form
doing
In contrast
, some believe that it is the government
's responsibility
to make people
avoid preventable illnesses. I believe that this
statement is wrong because not only the
Add a missing verb
is the
government
that
responsible for that, but the most important thing is the individuals Correct pronoun usage
apply
itself
. Authority has provided the standard Correct pronoun usage
themselves
health
care and education on how to prevent that illness Change preposition
among citizen
citizen
. They gave Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
people
information such
as the knowledge of what media the virus can possibly spread
, how
to prevent the spreading like washing your hands regularly, and not Correct word choice
and how
gather
with other Wrong verb form
gathering
people
. Some regulations made
to be obeyed, Add a missing verb
are made
however
, some people
choose to break it
. There are Correct pronoun usage
them
also
people
that got infected, they don’t want to follow the protocols that authority
have already announced. Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
For example
, some
cases in Indonesia, there’s someone who got infected with COVID-19 and Change preposition
in some
instead
of following the protocols, they escaped the hospital and spread
the virus to the
others. These can cause the others to be infected. So that’s how the Correct article usage
apply
viruses
still spreading and yet people
still blaming their authority. The fact that people
doing
risky behaviours like going out and Wrong verb form
do
gather
with Wrong verb form
gathering
people
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
caused
them to get sick.
Wrong verb form
causes
To conclude
, government
indeed has a role in terms of protecting their Add an article
the government
people
from preventable viruses
, however
, the most important thing is back to the people
itself
, whether they want to do their part of maintaining their fitnesses or not.Correct pronoun usage
themselves
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