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Individual actions have little or no effect on climate change .For this reason , worthwhile change can only be made at governmental level.To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Much ink has been spilt analysing,assessing and identifying the underlying worth and imperativeness of taking steps to
control
 environmental factors.Given what has been said,a segment of society contends that ,
that
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 individuals have very little impact on controlling surrounding conditions ,others insist that saving it is the obligation of organisations to
control
 the factors which influence habitat negatively.In accordance with my point of view ,the stated suggestion supports the elements of practicality and objectivity,and
therefore
,it seems pragmatic to approve it.
This
 essay will highlight some compelling elements which are helping me to maintain my opinion without being influenced by any external factor . The most compelling evidence that supports my stance is based on the fact that governments have the power and resources to implement any order .As a matter of fact,they have authority over folks to command any specific order and policy ,
furthermore
,if individuals are not following their rules and regulations, they can penalise them with hefty charges and punishments.To illustrate the phenomenon,take the instance of Indonesia, To
control
 air and noise pollution ,they made a policy for car drivers who have odd number plates can use their car only on weekends,
in contrast
,even number plate holders can drive their cars
while
 working days of
week
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. Another prevalent factor highlights the significance of implementing laws to
control
 environmental pollutants by doing various campaigns.Admittedly,by organising different meetings,they can aware their public about the detrimental effects of pollutants on habitats.
Moreover
 ,by advertising on television,they can
also
 teach their audience to reduce waste,
furthermore
, by ensuring their responsibilities they can
also
 tackle
this
 issue. Conclusively,the debate which has been polarised and unending cannot be settled easily by just arguing and focusing one side on understanding.Needless to say,the aforementioned elements in favour of my opinion are subjectively valid,unobjectionable and reasonable to strengthen my opinion about the duties of organisations to protect surroundings from climate change.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your position and provides a concise overview of the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
lexical resource
Consider using a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas and strengthen your arguments.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation to improve clarity and coherence of your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • individual actions
  • governmental level
  • worthwhile change
  • impact
  • large-scale changes
  • set an example
  • policies
  • regulations
  • enforce
  • collaboration
  • renewable energy
  • initiatives
  • environmental regulations
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