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In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In these recent years, it has relatively become common
omitting
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 the
age
 criteria from the application form.
In other words
, nowadays the
age
 of an applicant doesn’t seem to be the main criteria. In my view, I believe it is a positive development.
This
age
 issue in applying for
jobs
 has been very controversial around the world. Many
people
 face it
,
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 when they
wanted
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 to apply for a job. There have been numerous complaints about
employers
' behaviour in front of elder
people
.
Additionally
,
this
 is called Ageism. Ageism is stereotyping or discrimination against individuals or groups on the basis of their
age
.
Moreover
, there have been numerous complaints against
employers
 who treat elder individuals with no respect. Many
people
 have lost their
jobs
 because they are considered old.
Also
, based on evidence, elder
people
 complain about being refused interest-free credit, a new credit card or travel insurance because of their
age
. Many
people
 believe these attitudes against elderly individuals are highly inequitable. All the negations have led
to
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local governments to come up with new regulations. Nowadays, there are some signs of hope.
For instance
, it used to be like,
employers
think
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 that manual
jobs
 which
require
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required
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 a lot of physical skills might be demanding for elder
people
, so they
reject
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 them immediately and didn’t even take their possible abilities into consideration. Or even when a company wanted to hire an attorney or an accountant they refused to hire an elder person, they would have thought maybe their knowledge is not updated and they cannot work professionally with computers or advanced software.
However
, nowadays there are some signs of hope.
And it
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 seems like in many countries they examine elderly
people
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people's
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 skills.
To sum up
, maybe it is true that some sorts of
jobs
 are not appropriate for every
age
.
Though
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 it still
doesn’t get
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is not
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the
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right for
employers
 to ignore applicants or treat
in
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them in
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 a not apt way.
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