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Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some individuals believe that male and female children should go to different
schools
.
However
, the others reckon that there are positive aspects for both sex children to go to the same
school
.
Although
 I partly agree with the former idea, the benefits from enrolling the mixed
schools
 outweigh those from entering separate
schools
. According to some statistics, the college enrollment rate for separate
schools
 is much higher than that for mixed
schools
.
For example
 in Japan, almost fifty per cent of freshmen in the
University
 of Tokyo, which is known as a top
university
 in the country, came from same-sex high
schools
.
Therefore
, at least for people who believe that entering college is the goal of education, it can be said that boys and girls should go to a different
school
.
However
, in my opinion, indeed one of the aims of going to the
school
 might be enrolling in a
university
, but long term benefits should be prioritized. In 2015, a famous American research group revealed a correlation between the marriage rate and the types of
schools
 in
terms
 of sex. The marriage ratio of people who graduated from the separated
school
 was far less than those who came from the mixed
school
. They concluded that early interaction with the opposite sex plays a pivotal role in
terms
 of the development of the country. In conclusion, in
terms
 of entering a
university
, same-sex education might be a better option, but in
terms
 of the prosperity of the nation, separate-sex education is much better and I strongly support the latter viewpoint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
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