You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: These days many people prefer online shopping to conventional shopping. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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E-shopping is the most popular choice
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traditional shopping owing to the advancement of technology. There are quite a lot of benefits and drawbacks of online shopping. Gone were the days,
where
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we
need
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to wait in the queue to buy
things
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and
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for
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the closure of the shops.
Due to
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online shopping, we can shop anywhere and anytime and we can call it
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24/7 shopping. Like in conventional shops, we can't find everything in
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same shops. As we have to travel to different stores to buy different items.
For instance
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, if you take
amazon
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Amazon
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, an online shopping app where we can buy anything in a single store. It is quite convenient.
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, during
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festive
season
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season,
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all offers made in
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apply
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E-shopping
is
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afforable
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affordable
compared to conventional ones. So,these benefits pull the crowd towards online websites to shop.
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, it
also
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has a flip side. If we
wanted
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to buy some clothes, it is very difficult to see a trail of
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as we should know the exact size which suits us. What if some
things
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received
from
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online
has
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have been
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damaged
.
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Well, we can just return it but the process of returning the item is
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a very hectic process. Meanwhile, we can't buy
things
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and receive
things
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instantly as we should wait for a specific time frame.
This
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make
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us ponder whether online shopping is a better option.
To conclude
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online shopping is really a breakthrough as it is the
easiet
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easiest
form of shopping but with several cons. Hopefully, technology will solve these problems in future.
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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conventional shopping
  • prefer
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • online shopping
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide range
  • competitive prices
  • accessible
  • comparison
  • lack of
  • physical experience
  • delayed delivery
  • potential
  • fraud
  • limited customer service
  • dependence
  • technology
  • impersonal
  • shopping experience
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