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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The new university sports
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 will be different from the old one. All of the facilities will be replaced and adding more places for students to entertaining. The old university sports
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 will be expanded to a more exciting place. There will be no more outdoor courts. The
first
 area like gyms, seating, changing room and 25m pool is kept, but the gym room is a lot bigger than usual so that it will have more types of the work out machine, and that
also allow
Suggestion
also allows
 more students to work out once at a time. The update
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 is added to a lot of fascinating places like two dance studios, two more changing rooms which we will have three changing rooms in total, a sports shop, a café, a sports hall, and a leisure pool. They planned to add these to increase the amount of the students that would like to have a place to hang out with friends and
also
 create more profit by
attached
Suggestion
attaching
 the sports hall, sports shop, and a café. In conclusion, the brand new
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 can amaze a lot of students and increase the income of the university by knowing how to use land smartly. ^�.d
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