IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: ○ Say that you liked their photos of your family ○ Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event ○ Give them the details of the event Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear….

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Dear Marina! We have just recieved a folder with photos of our family you sent us two hours ago. I should say: photos are fantastic! Thank’s for your work, I have already changed my profile photo on Facebook. By the way, we are planning our father’s birthday on the June 21st. And we will really appreciate if you can join the party as a photographer. I hope your answer will be “totally yes” because I have never met
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 a professional before: the way you manage the session itself making people confident in front of the camera is just a piece of art. Considering the event itself: it should take place in the new restaurant at the city center. It is called a bit strange “chat”. So the party will be hosted from 2-5 p.m. To give more details I should say that the party theme would be “ancient Egypt”, so it would be great if you have a costume with you.
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, I would not mind if you just look a formal way. Hope to hear positive from you and if it so, send a convenient meeting time and place to negotiate other details. Yours sincerely, Egor!

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Task Achievement
Make sure to open your letter with a proper salutation such as 'Dear Marina,' instead of 'Dear Marina!'. The use of a comma is more appropriate and formal for letter writing.
Task Achievement
Ensure that you use appropriate and consistent punctuation throughout the letter. Avoid using exclamation marks in formal writing unless it is to convey strong emotion or an imperative.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop a clear logical structure by organizing your content into separate paragraphs for each point. One paragraph should convey your appreciation for the photos, another to invite the photographer to the event, and a third to provide the details of the event.
Task Achievement
Try not to mix formal and informal language; maintain a consistently polite and formal tone suitable for a professional context.
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End your letter with an appropriate closing such as 'Yours sincerely,' followed by your name. Avoid using exclamation marks in the closing as well.
Coherence & Cohesion
Provide a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Begin with a brief opening thanking them for the photos, followed by a detailed body to discuss the event, and a polite conclusion to summarize and reiterate your request.
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