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Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their own personal happiness. Others argue that happiness can be affected by other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern world, people of
one
 group believe that being happy is the responsibility of individual while others believe that social factors can affect
one
’s
happiness
 and sorrow. Happy and sad moods are always depending on a person’s
behaviour
 and expectations. I strongly agree that no
one
 can make you happy rather than yourself, so believe in you and try to keep yourself happy on your own. On the
one
 hand, in
this
 technological era, the main key factor is people are losing their cheerfulness while spending most of their time by being virtual. They are making friends on social media
such
 as Facebook and Instagram, talking with them continuously, and that sentimental attachment cannot be long-lasting.
This
 can hurt
one
’s feelings by expecting from others.
One
 another reason is the
behaviour
 of the individual, people are busy with their own lives and their loved ones. When someone behaves rudely, people can start avoiding the person with
this
 visage and that can be the cause
one
 cannot bear
this
 response from other people.
Therefore
, the expected
happiness
 from others can never be with you for a long time.
On the other hand
, people who are always enjoying themselves with others or on their own are a precious creation of God.
This
 group of people can make their surrounding much more beautiful with their nature and
behaviour
. Because expectations always hurt,
this
 community believe in inner peace and love towards themselves. They are less virtual and more real. Individual who is not seeking for something from someone else and love unconditionally his loved ones, no
one
 else matters to their personal
happiness
. To conclude, I must say individual
behaviour
 and perspective to see
this
 world makes you happy and sad. People have their own choice to reflect on their nature and expectation. In my opinion,
one
 can find
happiness
 from your own self, no other factors can affect you if really wants to be happy.
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