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Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their own personal happiness. Others argue that happiness can be affected by other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #individuals #happiness #factors
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 modern world, people of
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 group believe that being happy is the responsibility of individual while others believe that social factors can affect
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’s
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 and sorrow. Happy and sad moods are always depending on a person’s
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 and expectations. I strongly agree that no
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 can make you happy rather than yourself, so believe in you and try to keep yourself happy on your own. On the
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 hand, in
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 technological era, the main key factor is people are losing their cheerfulness while spending most of their time by being virtual. They are making friends on social media
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 as Facebook and Instagram, talking with them continuously, and that sentimental attachment cannot be long-lasting.
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 can hurt
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’s feelings by expecting from others.
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 another reason is the
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 of the individual, people are busy with their own lives and their loved ones. When someone behaves rudely, people can start avoiding the person with
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 visage and that can be the cause
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 cannot bear
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 response from other people.
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, the expected
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 from others can never be with you for a long time.
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, people who are always enjoying themselves with others or on their own are a precious creation of God.
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 group of people can make their surrounding much more beautiful with their nature and
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. Because expectations always hurt,
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 community believe in inner peace and love towards themselves. They are less virtual and more real. Individual who is not seeking for something from someone else and love unconditionally his loved ones, no
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 else matters to their personal
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. To conclude, I must say individual
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 and perspective to see
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 world makes you happy and sad. People have their own choice to reflect on their nature and expectation. In my opinion,
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 can find
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 from your own self, no other factors can affect you if really wants to be happy.
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