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Today, the high sale of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#sale #consumer #goods #power #society
In
this
 contemporary era, advertisement is considered
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the main tool for selling products. Even, people fail to recognize their actual needs and end up buying things which
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 not so necessary. It is agreed that increased sales of popular
goods
 are the outcome of powerful advertising. Analysing the advancement of technology and the tendency of human beings to value what they do not have will prove
this
.
Firstly
, the usage of technology is progressively on the rise. The
markting
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marketing
 firms are making use of
this
 to showcase their newly launched and high demand
goods
 through mediums
such
 as television, radio and social media etc.
For instance
, a person who
do
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 not have
premium
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a premium
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 membership
of
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 youtube, may not be able to watch a film without interruption of
markting
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marketing
 videos.
Furthermore
, popular brands use social platforms
such
 as Facebook and Instagram to sell their items.
As a result
, nobody is able to
spent
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 a day without watching a single promotion programme.
Secondly
,
the
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society
is divides
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 into different strata based on the wealth of people.
Therefore
, the poorer
has
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 a tendency to follow
the
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 footsteps of
of
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affluent one.
For example
, a study conducted in America has shown that
majority
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 of the participants value what they do not own than the things they actually possess.
Subsequently
, they end up buying unnecessary
goods
 in order to match
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 of the rich. Unfortunately, the organizations which sell appliances exploit
this
 basic human nature.
Thus
, people will fall
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this
 trap without even their knowledge. To sum up,
i
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 reiterate that, the more the influence of marketing, the higher the number of
goods
 sold.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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