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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most
people
 would agree that
car
 ownership has increased in recent years and is causing a range of problems, particularly in built-up areas. I think there are a number of ways that
governments
 can aim to deal with
this
. Many big
cities
 in the world have traffic problems but these problems vary.
For example
, it is reasonably easy to drive around my city after 10 am and before 5 pm.
However
, outside these hours, you have to allow double the usual time to reach your destination. In some other
cities
, traffic is congested at all times, and there is the continual sound of
car
 horns as
people
 try to get wherever they want to go. One of the best approaches
governments
 can take in busy
cities
 is to encourage the use of public transport.
This
 means the transport facilities have to be well run and
people
 must be able to afford them. Buses, trams and trains are good ways of getting around, and if they are cheap and reliable,
people
 will use them. Another approach is to discourage
people
 from actually entering the city by building
car
 parks and shopping centres on the outskirts. Many
cities
 around the world do
this
 quite successfully and offer passengers bus transport into the centre
,
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 if they need it. At peak travel periods,
governments
 can
also
 run campaigns to encourage
people
 to be less dependent on their cars. Apparently, a lot of
car
 trips involve very short journeys to, say, the supermarket or local school. These are often unnecessary, but we automatically get in our cars without thinking.
Clearly
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 we all have a responsibility to look after our
cities
.
Governments
 can do a lot to improve the situation and part of what they do should involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.
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