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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to study/work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. My name is Faisal Mahamood and I am a first-year student at your esteemed university. I am writing
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 letter to express my frustration about accommodation in Bridgetown Hall.
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 with, I have been living in
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 dorm since January 2023, almost one month. I am sharing my room with one brother who is a second-year student. As a novice, I need to study a lot to cope with my curriculum activities. But it is a matter of sorrow that I can't concentrate on my studies because my roommate plays music till late at night.
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, I had already informed him about the disturbance but he did not give it a try.
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, he listens not only
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to songs
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 but
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 brings some friends into the room randomly. I tried to cooperate with
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 but now it is beyond my tolerance level. I want you to step into the matter and make some arrangements for me.
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, you can arrange a room with my fellow classmates because I believe it will be convenient for me. I would appreciate your prompt response on the matter. Please let me know if you have any concerns. Yours faithfully, Faisal

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Tone Appropriateness
Make sure to use suitable formal language and avoid informal terms such as 'brother' when referring to a roommate.
Greeting and Closing
Use appropriate salutations such as 'Dear Sir or Madam,' and a formal closing like 'Yours sincerely,' when writing formal letters.
Paragraph Management
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs with a single idea in each. The first paragraph should introduce the situation, followed by a paragraph detailing the problems, and a final paragraph stating the preferred solution.
Task Fulfillment
Ensure that you thoroughly address the task by providing a clear description of the current accommodation situation, a detailed explanation of the issues arising from it, and a specific request for the type of accommodation you would prefer.
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