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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

#people #government #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
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Many
people
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 state that to deal with environmental issues, gov
ernment sh
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the government
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ould raise
fuel
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pri
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ce fo
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prices
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r cars and other
vehicles
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. I totally agree with
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 statement for the following reasons.
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, if authority raises taxes on petrol,
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 would be able to reduce the density of means of transportation. To be more specific, the number of cars for journeys will be constrained, which helps to cut down emi
ssion, a
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emissions
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 detrimental factor contributing to gre
enhouse ef
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the greenhouse
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fect. Statistics show that the figure of
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ve
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for
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hicles for long journeys has declined significantly by 20% since the
fuel
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 cost climbed that improves the air quality considerably in recent years. Another point to consider is that
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 rising in
fuel
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price
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 can provide the incentive for alternative
fuel
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. In more det
ails,
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people
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 are encouraged to use
fuel
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 based on waste products
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 as vegetable oil or corn-based ethanol. Research sho
w th
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shows
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at using these environment-friendly fuels can decrease a l
a
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rge amount of carbon dioxide rel
easing to
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released
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th
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into
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e environment.
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, inc
rease in
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an increase
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 the
price
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 of
fuel
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 can limit environmental problems. Despite these, many
people
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 still claim that government can raise cit
izen’s aw
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citizens’
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areness of some
fue
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l efficient ve
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fuel-efficient
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hicle types
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 of increasing the
fuel
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 cost. They may believe that these means of transportation have sma
rt op
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a smart
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e
ration to
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operations
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 help economize petrol and decrease the amount of exhausted gas. To
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, I will argue that
fuel
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-saving
vehicles
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 may not be a perfect solution because of customer unaffordability. Specifically, it is exc
essive fi
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an excessive
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nancial cost for con
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a consumer
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sumer to
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consumers
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 purchase
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 product. In my opinion, upgrading the infrastructure of transportation is considered to be an effective way.
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, a good transport system can drop traffic jam
wh
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jams
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ich produces a vast amount of exh
austed fu
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exhausting
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mes causing air pollution. Clearly, imp
rovement tr
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an improvement
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a
ffic st
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of traffic
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ructure is necessary for solving environmental issues. In conclusion, there are
a
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wide range of solutions to help cope with traffic and pollution problems.
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, a substantial increase in
fuel
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price
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 would be a useful method for env
ironment. I
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the environment
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t can not only help to reduce the crowd of
vehicles
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, but
also
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 encourage
people
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 to use friendly
fuel
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.
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