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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and that it could be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some scientists believe that
communication
 between
Earth
 and intelligent celestial should be imposed,
however
, others refute
this
 idea as they find it hazardous. While it is a risk to contact unknown celestial creatures as these might have the intention to kill
humans
instead
 of establishing cooperation, it is of my opinion that
communication
 with
life
 on other planets will benefit both parts mutually, as
knowledge
 can be shared and exploited.
Life
 on other planets than
Earth
 might consider the human species as a threat.
That is
 to say, celestial creatures will likely have another body language and a type of
communication
 different from that of human beings, which can make
communication
 challenging and difficult.
This
 might cause frustration and human beings may be judged as strange and ludicrous by the non-terrestrial creatures and potentially make them willing to destroy the human race.
Although
 contacting the unknown comes with a risk, I believe there is a potential for fruitful consequences from
this
 contact. Contacting objects in space may be positive for the planet
Earth
 as
life
 in space may be willing to share
knowledge
 with
humans
 that both benefit from.
This
 is because intelligent
life
 will be able to understand that peace and tranquillity are more attractive than hatred and war. They will understand that by sharing
knowledge
 both types of lives will have better chances of survival.
For example
, the
knowledge
 of how to survive and travel in space among those living on another planet than
Earth
 will be useful for
humans
 and vice versa. To conclude, despite the fact that unknown celestial
life
 can be dangerous towards
humans
, I think contact with these will likely be beneficial for the human race as
knowledge
 can be shared that will benefit
life
 regardless of the planet they live on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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