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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #ability
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It is well-known that some schools separate
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 in different classes by their academic ability.
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, some people argue that we should educate all
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 together, from my perspective, I do believe that in childhood learning with same-level
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 is more competitive. In terms of
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, dividing them based on their academic ability will increase their competitiveness.
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,
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 will not waste time waiting for other classmates to understand what teachers have taught in class. In a short term,
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 will have more opportunities to learn more knowledge in school life. In a long term, in
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 learning environment,
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 would become more competitive.
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, it is easier for teachers to prepare teaching materials. They only need to consider what level
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 are at, and
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 design teaching materials suited them.
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, educating all
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 together will help them adapt to society in advance. School is a small society, and
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 can learn book knowledge and experience how to cooperate with different levels of people. In
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 learning environment, when
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 have a teamwork project, they can experience how to put members of groups in a suitable position. Teachers,
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, should spend more time looking after
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. They need to consider more what level of teaching material is suitable for all
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. By way of conclusion, both methods have their pros and cons. One makes
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 more competitive, and the other one helps them adapt to society in advance. I strongly feel that people should be educated in a competitive environment.
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