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The governments shoild give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on ,even if they are not unemployed. To whhat extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the increase in the cost of almost all necessary items, earning members of a family find it quite difficult to manage the monthly budget with their monthly wage. If the government could provide middle-class and poor families with some additional money, the situation would get better to some extent. I agree with the above statement.
This
 essay will state reasons for agreement on the topic and some points regarding why
this
 should not happen. On the one hand, having an additional income source, by means of the government, seems immensely beneficial for poor families,
such
 as those in developing countries. They might use
this
 amount for their children's higher education, which could not have been possible with the low income earned by working parents.
Additionally
, most elderly family members require some kind of medical treatment, the burden of which may well be lessened with
this
 additional pay, surely for daily wage earners whose jobs are precarious.
However
, I accept that the above-stated supporting ideas would not be the only case. Regardless of the reasons for which the money would be given to
people
, some of them would never use it in the way it is intended for,
such
 as
people
 involved in gambling. Not only
this
, but
also
people
 might become entirely dependent on
this
 pay, which is certainly not the intention of the government. Overall, it seems advisable that
this
 scheme of providing a plus wage to
people
 by national authorities,
besides
 their monthly income, should be enforced, especially for
people
 in real need.
Furthermore
, some strict rules will suffice to prevent wasteful and unnecessary use of
this
 pay.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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