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Art classes should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

#art #classes #school
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Some people believe that it should be compulsory for high
school
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students
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 to study
art
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 subjects. While I suppose that
art
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 may bring several benefits to pupils in high
school
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, I disagree that all
students
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 are obligated to join
art
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school
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. On the one hand, I agree that there are some advantages to learning
art
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 in high
school
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.
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 with,
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-related lessons may entertain
students
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, and help them relieve anxiety and stress after consecutive hours of learning.
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, it can protect them from mental illness.
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, arts may support
students
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 in enhancing various soft skills including creativity, problem-solving and critical thinking, which are crucial for their future careers, especially if they work in
art
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-related occupations. On another hand, I disagree with the idea that
art
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classes
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 are compulsory for all pupils in high
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;
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, I believe it should be an option for those who are interested or pursuing a career path in the
art
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 industry.
Firstly
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, these
classes
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 can place an extra burden on
students
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’ workload, when they have to prioritize their time and energy on subjects that are more crucial and relate to their future jobs
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 as languages and natural ones.
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, it may be pricey for
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 when they have to pay an amount of money to buy learning materials including paint, and various types of pens, that not all student's families can afford. In conclusion, I agree that
art
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classes
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 can benefit
students
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 in certain aspects.
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, I am of the opinion that it should not be compulsory for high
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students
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 to participate in these
classes
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.
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