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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate
whether
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 the authorities resolve the global surroundings issue is to hike the
fuel’s
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fuel
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price
. In my opinion, I consider myself an advocate of the
difference
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 method. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 is not the optimal tactic to solve the
environment
. On the grounds that all vehicles run on gas and no matter how much the
price
 of
fuel
 increases, people still need it.
For example
,
although
government
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the government
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 in Vietnam accelerates the
fuel’s
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fuel
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price
, citizens still buy myriads of fossil
fuel
with
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at
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 high cost, which
make
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 no difference in
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the decline
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decline
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the
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amount
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 of vehicles
use
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.
Hence
,
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a rise
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rise
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rising
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in the
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the
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apply
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fuel’s
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fuel
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price
 is not
effect
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affect
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 to protect
the
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of the
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 surroundings. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the increase in the
price
 of
fuel
 is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more far-reaching alternatives. Since electric vehicles run on renewable energy so
it
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they
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 do not release
a
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apply
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greenhouse gas and
then
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they
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 it do not influence on air quality of the
environment
.
For instance
, Vinfast, a popular car
make
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made
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 in Vietnam,
it
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has a hybrid vehicle which
meet
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 the demand for vehicle’s people to go to school or work and do not cause
bad
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a bad
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 impact on
air
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the air
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 quality of the surroundings.
Thus
, using a hybrid vehicle is one of the best
method
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methods
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 has
effect
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an effect
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 to decrease
amount
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the amount
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 of CO2, which can protect the
environment
. To sum up, increasing the
fuel’s
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fuel
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price
 is not the best way since there are a bunch of
effec
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effect
way
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ways
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 to resolve the world’s
environment
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environmental
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problem
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problems
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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