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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons? Is it a positive trend or a negative trend?

#culture #world #trend
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So, for the
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reason
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, I think in the long term, that will be more positive than negative. Nowadays, every country in the world has its own
culture
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 and language, but some reasons make all
cultures
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 change in similar ways. Will it be positive or negative in the long run if all specific
cultures
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 merge to form world
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culture
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? To start with, I think I have three reasons why
culture
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 is becoming more similar around the globe, which I will explain in the
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 paragraph.
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 with, I believe that nowadays every country communicates with other
countries
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 more than ever before, and
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 is the most important
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 statement because communication can help
people
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 understand each other because
cultures
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 from different nations are combined.So, for the
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reason
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, I think in the long term, that will be more positive than negative.
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, I believe travel tickets are cheaper than before.
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,
people
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 who live in a town have enough cash to spend on
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, and that makes them connect together, whether through
culture
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 or language.
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, when
people
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 have
business
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 or go out of town, sometimes they will spread their
culture
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 to other
countries
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 and make those
countries
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 have their cultural knowledge, and maybe someday other
countries
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 will adapt to their
culture
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. So, for the
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reason
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, I think in the long term, that will be more positive than negative too. To summarize, some
people
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 believe that
cultures
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 becoming more similar around the world is a bad thing, but I believe it is a good thing for two reasons: communication and travel, both of which help
people
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 understand each other's
cultures
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 better.
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