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For those less developed countries, the disadvantages of developing tourism are as much as the advantages. To what extent do you agree.

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Over the past twenty years or so, many developing
countries
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 have faced an issue about whether they should develop
tourism
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 as their national
industry
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. Some nations think that they should develop
tourism
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 as their main national
industry
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 because
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industry
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 can attract more tourists from different
countries
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 and boost their local economic growth faster than traditional kinds of industries
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 as agriculture and fishing,
while
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 other
countries
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 consider that
tourism
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 will
cause
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 more disadvantages than advantages as more travellers may bring more rubbish and damages that the local cannot endure and deal with these two tricky problems. From my perspective, I believe that developing
countries
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 should develop their
tourism
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 industries, which can help them acquire more pros than cons for the following reasons.
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, it is generally accepted that
tourism
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 is a green
industry
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, which means that it will not
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 as many pollutants as many manufacturing factories.
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,
tourism
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 can help less developed
countries
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 find a way to attract more visitors and boost their local economic situations with lower opportunity costs.
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, some East African nations
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 as Kenya and Ethiopia have promoted their safari activities in their country's national parks where foreign visitors can see many different kinds of wildlife and environments that are hard to be seen in these foreign
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.
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, some nations doubt that
tourism
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 may
cause
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 more disadvantages than advantages for their
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.
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 to say, more foreign visitors mean that more damage and disturbances may be brought to the locals, and the local environments may be worse than before.
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, some European
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 like Austria and Germany are popular for their natural scenery and historical heritages to attract more foreigners to visit;
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, too many foreign travellers
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 the local residents to suffer from too much rubbish and environmental damage that will need local government to spend extra budgets in managing the natural resources and historical heritages. In conclusion, it can be asserted that the pros of
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 in developing
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 outweigh its cons because more benefits and profits
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 as more profits and less pollution can be gained from these developing
countries
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.
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