Some people believe that the government should support the funds for the arts, while some other people suggest that the money should be used for public health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals think that the authority should support the funds for the
arts
,
whereas
some other
people
suggest that the
money
should be utilized for public
health
and
education
. In my opinion, the
government
should spend
this
money
in
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public
health
and
education
because
health
and
education
is
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basic
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need for
people
, and
it
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improve
living
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standards of
people
. On the one hand, some feel
government
should
funding
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arts
.
This
is because
arts
namely, painting, and music can encourage creativity among
people
.
For example
, playing music for children can help children to
thinking
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out of
box
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and mitigate stress.
Furthermore
, supporting
arts
can enhance
local
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economy of
country
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the country
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. To illustrate, if
government
support museum and art gallery
this
can attract many tourists from worldwide in order to see local cultures and heritage.
Therefore
, tourists will spend their
money
on hotels ,transport, and
visit
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the exhibition
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exhibition
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, which
this
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can
boosts
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local
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economy.
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those
people
who believe
authority
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should spend these funds on public
health
and
education
.
To begin
with, healthcare is basic
needs
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for
citizens
.
As a result
,
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government
should spend more
money
on
this
sector in order to fight diseases and provide
high quality
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services for their
citiznes
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citizens
.
For instance
, the
government
should provide free healthcare for all
citizens
in order to make it accessible for all
citizens
.
Moreover
, more funding for
education
can have a positive impact
in
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socity
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society
. To illustrate, if the
government
provide free
education
for all
citizens
this
can motivate more
people
to
joining
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to schools and universities.
Consequently
, In
future
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we will have more
porfessional
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professional
people
in
curcial
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crucial
majors, medicine, nursing, and engineering, which
this
is
can
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increase
number
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of
professionals
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people
who available to serve
community
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.
To sum up
, I totally believe the
government
should spend more on
education
and
health
instead
of
arts
due to
education
and
health
is
basic
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a basic
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need for
people
and
it
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they
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provide vital services for
country
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the country
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.
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