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There are currently many endangered species at risk of extinction and it’s equally important to save all of them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that many
species
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 are critically endangered of extinction and it is equally important to save all of them. I strongly agree with the statement because having diverse fauna for future
generations
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 and protecting the ecosystem is crucial to maintaining the natural heritage and maintaining the cycle of life. Preserving natural heritage for future
generations
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 is important because our younger generation can learn which is the role of every
species
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. Learning from them and teaching how we can recover them and protect their
habitat
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 for younger
generations
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 will ensure the natural cycle of life.
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, bees are a
species
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that is
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 at risk of extinction and is important to recognize that they have a crucial role in food production.
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, by recovering
this
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species
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 we are ensuring that we can grow our food production and no
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 changes will affect our
habitat
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 and the rest of the
species
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. To save all of the
species
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 equally, we should
also
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 protect the ecosystem by avoiding
habitat
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 destruction. One of the main actions that we can take to avoid the destruction of habitats is to designate protected areas that no humans can alter. With
this
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 action, we can tackle more than one problem at the same time, protecting the
habitat
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 and the
species
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.
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, by protecting an area you are letting the entire ecosystem grow permitting animals, insects, plants and so on to be recovered.
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, I firmly agree that all
the
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species
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 have to be equally important to have a natural heritage for future
generations
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 and protect the biosphere and
habitat
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 to maintain the cycle of life.

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Expand on your reasoning and examples to fully cover all angles of the argument.
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Clarify some ideas to ensure they are comprehensive; avoid vague statements.
Coherence/Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with a precise introduction and a strong conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint effectively.
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You have included relevant and specific examples, which support your argument well.
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The essay covers the topic effectively, addressing key points on why it's important to save all endangered species.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • pollinators
  • ecological impact
  • ripple effects
  • interdependent
  • resource allocation
  • critically endangered
  • recovery
  • intervention
  • habitat destruction
  • broader environmental issues
  • habitats and ecosystems
  • natural heritage
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