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The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
The pie charts above illustrate the five modes of
transportation
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 - car,
bicycle
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,
bus
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,
train
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 and walking -
people
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 used to travel to
university
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 in 2004 and 2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, cars were the most popular mode of
transportation
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 in 2004,
while
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bus
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 became the most preferred mode of
transportation
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 in 2009.
However
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,
train
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 and walking were the two least popular modes of
transportation
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 in both years. In 2004, 51% of
people
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 travelled to
university
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 by car, followed by
bus
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 at 33%.
In contrast
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,
bicycle
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, walking and
train
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 were recorded less than 10% each. The percentage of
people
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 travelling to
university
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 by
bicycle
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, walking and
train
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 was 9%, 4% and 3% respectively. In 2009, the proportion of
people
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 using the
bus
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 increased to 46%, making the
bus
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 the most used.
Nevertheless
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,
people
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 travelled to
university
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 by car declined to only 28% but was still identified as the second most popular mode of
transportation
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.
Additionally
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, the percentage of
people
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 travelling to the
university
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 by
bicycle
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, walking and
train
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 increased slightly to 16%, 6% and 4% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, bicycle, bus, train, people, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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