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Many people today buy ready-made food rather than spend time cooking. What do you think are the reason for this Do you think the advantages of this development outright the disadvantages

It is often seen that a huge number of individuals prefer
food
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 ready to eat these days
instead
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 of cooking at home. The main reason, I believe, behind
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 trend is people's advanced and busy social lives which was not so familiar to our ancestors.
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, I personally feel that the pros of consuming pre-cooked
food
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 would never outweigh the disadvantages because of its detrimental impacts on our lives.
To begin
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 with, having ready-made
food
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 is really common among different groups of people because of their busy lifestyles. Many families are supported by both wives and husbands and in some cases, both parents have to go to work to feed their families except wealthy ones, so they are unable to cook fresh meals every day.
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, compared to homemade meals,
food
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that is
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 ready to eat is considered more cost-effective as well than making it at home.
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, nuclear families in Bangladesh generally prefer going out in the evening or buying pre-cooked
food
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 on the way to their homes, as they want to avoid extra costs and
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save their energy for next-day jobs. Despite some benefits of
this
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 matter, I believe that the downwords of
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 type of
food
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 outweigh the advantages. Some
health
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 experts say that ready-made
food
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 contains preservatives that are harmful to our
health
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. To make
food
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 mouth-watering and tasty, companies
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 use various ingredients that are full of unhealthy fat, sugar, and salt; which leads to various
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 issues
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 as obesity, diabetes, and heart disease.
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according to
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 a World
Health
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 Organization recent report, it is more common to be overweight and consume pre-made, and fast
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 ,
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, people who ensure to have enough healthy
food
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 tend to lead healthier lives.

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task achievement
Make sure to fully answer all parts of the question to improve your score.
coherence
Use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas better.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, especially in supporting details.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states the main topic and your opinion.
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You provide relevant examples to support your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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