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The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps illustrate the current layout of the Southside and its proposed changes for the development.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the main objective of the construction is to extend the
centre
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 area to allow more spaces for fashion, supermarket, and beauty stores by demolishing some areas for eateries, playground, golf course, and
park
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. The current layout of the mall consists of a playground, eateries, cinemas, a department store, and a supermarket. Near the entrance, the car
park
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 and fitness
centre
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 are located.
In addition
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, to the east of the
centre
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, there is a wide area established for a golf course and a
park
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. The proposal for the development is to extend the
centre
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 area to allow more spaces for various shops, through which the golf course and
park
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 will be demolished to accommodate the extension plan of the department and fashion stores. On the northern side, the spaces for eateries and playgrounds will be converted into beauty and shoe stores.
Moreover
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, to the south of the
centre
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, the parking lot will be enlarged at the expense of the fitness site,
while
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 the location for the supermarket will remain the same.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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