Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.

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It is a debated issue whether workers should retain their jobs or retire from
service
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the service
once they attain their termination
age
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. I partly agree that people should retire from their
work
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once they are of
age
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with the following reasons. Aged individuals are assumed to occupy space for the younger generation in the workforce. When the labour market is saturated with people who are of retirement
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age there
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age, there
is little or no vacancy for young school leavers. A relevant study shows that nations like Japan, who retain the
aged for
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aged, for
a
longer
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long
time have more unemployed youths.
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, the
work
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force is devoid of fresh ideas
from
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for
youngsters.
Also
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, ageing is accompanied
with
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by
weakness and various ailments. To illustrate, Jobs which require standing or taking a particular posture for a long time might not be suitable for the old because most of them have one health issue or the other. For
this
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reason, they are discontinued
form
a giver or sender
from
woking
actively engaged in paid work
working
. In
contast
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
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context
, as one does a particular vocation for a long time, experience is gained. Most companies find it very difficult to retire their aged staff because of their knowledge about the job.
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, In Japan, staff are trained and retained for years and it is quite tough to let go of
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experienced staff.
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, individuals are left to
work
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even when they attain termination
age
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.
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, incomes generated while working at old
age
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becomes handy for the aged. They
aslo
in addition
also
have various needs which
requires
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require
to be sorted out. In order
wards
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to ward
, they need to
work
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to make ends meet. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am of the opinion that aged people should be allowed to
work
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so as to share
useful experience
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the useful experience
useful experiences
with the younger ones and
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to enable them meet their financial needs through wages that are being paid.
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, more job opportunities should be available to the younger generation too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • pension systems
  • financial security
  • physical and mental health
  • youth unemployment
  • job opportunities
  • fresh perspectives
  • hobbies and interests
  • passionate workers
  • flexible retirement options
  • social security
  • recuperate
  • decades of hard work
  • contribute skills and experience
  • financial difficulties
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