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The use of smartphones is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology not on our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Owing to advancement in technology, many people are dependent on gadgets. Many
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a politically organized body of people under a single government
nations
 that, use of smartphones has produced a detrimental impact on our intellectual level, as we are dependent on them,
instead
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 of our minds. I partially agree
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with
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 statement.
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, smartphones have created ease in life of mankind, dependency on them has
harmful effect
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harmful effects
a harmful effect
 on our intellect. It is the nature of humans to opt for things that creates comfort in life without considering perilous outcome,
this
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 is the case with
this
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 ubiquitous technology. As an illustration, youngsters nowadays defer to do manual simple calculation by brainstorming as they can simply get the answer by clicking a button via online calculator app present
in
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on
phone
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the phone
.
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 it is common to opt for comfort rather than intellectual thinking as
new generation
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a new generation
the new generation
 is becoming dependent on
hand held
small and light enough to be operated while you hold it in your hands
handheld
 technologies.
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, to
dangerous effects
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the dangerous effects
 of dependency on smartphones, in reality, it boosts our memory.
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, producing
positive impact
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a positive impact
 on our mental health.
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, a study done in Pakistan revealed that people who continuously set reminders on their phone enhances their memory as continuous repetition has profound impact on spatial awareness.
This
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 method was considered classical in ancient times to create productive thinking and long term memories.
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,
healthy
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health
 benefits of smartphone technology must be taken into consideration. To conclude, in my opinion,
dependency
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depending
 on hand held technologies has positive as well as negative aspects to consider.
Although
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 it
defers
be different
differs
 from reasonable thinking, it
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 enhances our memory process and strengthen it.

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