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Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. do you agree or disagree?

#people #sport #waste #leisure #time
Sport is a very good exercise and favourite pastime for some whereas it is in contradiction some argue that it is
waste
Suggestion
a waste
 of time to just to watch like
couch potato
Suggestion
a couch potato
couch potatoes
. Watching sport has its own set of merits,
for
example for
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example, for
 every mental task you perform you have your own strategy if you apply the same here in sport, to win/lose the
game it
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game, it
 all depends on the plan you make which improves your decision making and makes you learn how to tackle whatever shit life brings in. Being an umpire will require keen observational skills which is not a cake walk. Coming back to demerits, sitting and watching doesn't
make
engage in
do
 you any good unless and until you learn something out of it and apply those in daily life. It is your call how will you enjoy, learn and make the most out of it.

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