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Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in the recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that creative artists should have absolute
freedom
 to create their own
artwork
 without any restriction from
government
. Others believe some form of artifices should not be available to the general public. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss if creative artists should always be given the
freedom
 to express their own ideas without any influence by the
government
. I believe artists should have complete
freedom
 on what they would like to create. By limiting what an artist can create, it is limiting their creativity. Art pieces, no matter it is in words, picture, music or film format, enrich people's mind. What makes a human different from an animal is our ability of complex reasoning, using of complex language, and solve complicated problems.
Artwork
 enables us to deliver complex ideas in a form that people can share among people.
However
, I
also
 believe not all
artwork
 should be available to the general public. As discussed earlier,
artwork
 enables us to present ideas in a form that people easier share among us. Some people might use
this
 as a medium for propaganda harmful message to the general public.
For example
, people can create messages to encourage racialism, human slaughtering, sex trafficking or prompting violent. Even though art piece creation should not be restricted by the
government
, certain arts should be accessible only by certain ages to prevent harmful message delivered to the young generation that might not have enough experience to judge if something is right or wrong. In conclusion,
government
 should create an atmosphere that allows artists have no restriction on their
artwork
 creation.
However
, certain art pieces should not be accessible by part of the public. By giving artists sufficient
freedom
 allows them to create any art-pieces as they wish. Limiting the access of
such
 art by ages allows the
government
creates
Suggestion
to create
 harmony in our society.

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