It is quite common for both parents in a family to work. Sometimes this is because they need two salaries to survive whereas other times it is their choice. What are the problems you see in this situation? How does this affect the children and the family life? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, most people are living in an open economy, so it is quite common for both parents in a family to work because they need two salaries to survive, whereas other times it is their choice, the only problem in

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situation is lack of care from parents in the childhood may affect the children when they grown up,

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may lead to many

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problems. If a person has been abandoned from their childhood, he or she may experience a lot of mental problems when they are grown up, which have been discovered as; depression, bipolar, schizophrenia, paranoid. The adults will

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face social problems

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as; bullied, isolated from community, living in poverty.

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, when the parents are too busy with their jobs,

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will make them stressed and there is a high chance that they will fall into problems

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as; substance abused, child abused, labours trafficking.

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will lead to a destruction of their own family and a dysfunctional family is a seed of many crimes. To prevent

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, the community must correct itself by working hard to increase people's awareness, as well as by helping the broken families in recovery. In summary,

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is consists of many communities and community is made by many families,

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, it is true to say that family is the root of

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, a dysfunctional family may damage and lead to the destruction of a

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, increasing people's awareness in developing and protecting their own

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, may help them reduce the overall stress of their

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and guide them self to a more beautiful life, with less crime and problem caused by the parents that unable to pay more attention to their own family because they need more money to survive the modern competitive economy.

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Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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dual-income families
work-life balance
parent-child interaction
childcare services
financial stability
career-oriented parents
emotional development
social development
household responsibilities
parental supervision
academic performance
family cohesion
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