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Currency notes have been replaced by plastic money and now its all about electronic money . Discuss advantages and disadvantage.

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These days most of the people prefer to pay via cards or through net-banking so uses of cash
has been reduced
Suggestion
have been reduced
 drastically. Virtual
money
 has taken the place of physical
money
.
This
 essay will throw some light on both pros and cons of using payment gateways over cash.
To begin
 with the advantages,
firstly
 it allows you to pay to a person residing in a remote location.
For instance
, now parents do not need to visit their kid's school to pay their fees
,
Accept space
,
they can do it comfortably while sitting at home only.
Another
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Other
 benefits of
this
 is, a person’s time is saved as now he does not need to visit banks or ATM, and wait in long queues to withdraw
money
. In early age, when people used to go outside for shopping they used to make sure that they have enough
money
 with them, but now its not required as most of merchants allow to pay thr
ough
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to use
debit cards, credit cards or banking application. Admittedly, there are some disadvantages too. One of the main issue with
this
 is safety. Cyber crime has increased so much that there are possible chances of vulnerability. Hackers may hack your online banking password, and easily access your all
money
. Another problem is for old age people who are not as te
chnology f
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technologically
riendly as youngsters and may experience discomfort while using e-
money
. In conclusion, I will say that it is a good development and people should use cards or banking application as long as it is done carefully.

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