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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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In few parts of United States curfew is imposed and kids are not sanctioned to visit outside their houses, but they could go outside along with a senior family member at night after a specific time. In my opinion, it is very necessary to keep youngsters safe and secure from out evils. In order to keep our immature ones safe, we should not allow them to wander outside alone. Because in late hours we see that many wild animals, move towards populated areas to find food
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 Pigs are usually come out in the darkness to find food in the garbage so if the kids will go out at that time there are chances that wild animals can hurt children. Many cases have been reported since 2018 that Pigs attacked people in different areas. So not only minors, but
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 elders should stay at their places. Many criminals like to do street crimes and snatching valuable items from the general public at night because at night they won't allow CCTV cameras to capture their image while doing crime. The latest survey delineates that 90 % street crimes recorded in the
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 six months after evening hours and the rest of the other street crimes recorded in the morning. So If youngsters will stay at home after dusk they could save themselves from many catastrophic situations.
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, if there is a dire need to go outside,
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 it is suggested that youth should go out with a mature person. So that a mature person from their family can look after and take care of children while they are outside in darkness. A conclusion can be drawn from
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 issue that, adolescent should confined at their residence after seeing darkness in the sky and law enforcement agencies should focus on providing security to not only kids, but citizens too, so that they can go outside their places at any time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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