The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the development of technology,
people
tend to use electronic media
more and more. Some people
think that it affects negatively on
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people
's relationships
. Personally, I agree with this
idea, but I still believe it has some positive effects as now will be explained.
On one hand, electronic media
are likely to one
of the reasons causing problems in Add a missing verb
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relationships
. Firstly
, using electronic media
such
as mobile phones makes them worse in communication. People
may have a tendency to rely on it to send messages instead
of talking in person. Secondly
, excessively using electronic media
could reduce communication skills. Indeed, people
do not need to use body language, which makes them find it difficult to explain their own thoughts when facing to face. Consequence
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Consequently
due to
fewer interactions, people
would face the risk of lacking confidence which makes them scared of public speaking.
On the other hand
, electronic media
are also
a key feature contributing to making relationships
better. If in the past people
had to spend a month on sending a message, nowadays thanks to the growth of advanced technology, particularly electronic media
, it helps people
to receive messages immediately or even see each other through video calls. Furthermore
, the
development of technology, many social networks were born Change preposition
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such
as Twitter and Facebook, allowed
users to make friends from all over the world, which Wrong verb form
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help
to widen their personal Wrong verb form
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relationships
.
In conclusion, I think electronic media
has its own benefits and downsides. It all depends on how people
use them.Submitted by phuong.nguyenthingoc289 on
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