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The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of technology,
people
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 tend to use electronic
media
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 more and more. Some
people
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 think that it affects negatively
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people
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's
relationships
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. Personally, I agree with
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 idea, but I still believe it has some positive effects as now will be explained. On one hand, electronic
media
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 are likely to
one
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 of the reasons causing problems in
relationships
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.
Firstly
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, using electronic
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such
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 as mobile phones makes them worse in communication.
People
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 may have a tendency to rely on it to send messages
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 of talking in person.
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, excessively using electronic
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 could reduce communication skills. Indeed,
people
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 do not need to use body language, which makes them find it difficult to explain their own thoughts when facing to face.
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,
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 fewer interactions,
people
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 would face the risk of lacking confidence which makes them scared of public speaking.
On the other hand
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, electronic
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 are
also
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 a key feature contributing to making
relationships
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 better. If in the past
people
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 had to spend a month on sending a message, nowadays thanks to the growth of advanced technology, particularly electronic
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, it helps
people
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 to receive messages immediately or even see each other through video calls.
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,
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 development of technology, many social networks were born
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 as Twitter and Facebook,
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 users to make friends from all over the world, which
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 to widen their personal
relationships
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. In conclusion, I think electronic
media
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 has its own benefits and downsides. It all depends on how
people
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 use them.

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