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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people believe that learning historical events bring no benefits for those who live in the current period. I strongly disagree with the opinion, as I believe that learning about the past has many benefits for every individual and the society as well, and the following essay will discuss it in details.
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 with, by studying history, people could learn about humanity and how to maintain
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 peace. From learning about
world
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war
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 one,
world
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war
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 two and other wars, people could learn that
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war
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the war
 was full of crime and violence. A lot of soldiers and innocent civilians became victims and there were some areas which have been permanently damaged due to wars
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 as Nagasaki and Hiroshima. By studying about these horrifying events, it is hoped that people all over the
world
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 will realise the cruelties of
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 and should maintain
world
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 peace. Studying about past events
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 has some positive effects on
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human
 health as well. By learning about the lifestyle of our ancestors
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 as how they hunt, plant seeds and ate, the scientist could predict some genetic diseases that modern people are facing. Some diseases might be genetically carried
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by
 the blood of our ancestors due to their nomadic lifestyles, and people could some research on how to cure these diseases. In conclusion, it is true that several people think that studying the past has no beneficial outcome
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of
 the modern people. I personally do not agree with the statement as I believe that learning about the past events has many benefits for human beings,
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 as in the politic, medical or economic areas.
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