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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The trend nowadays is that big companies are working with local communities in order to improve people’s well-being. In my view, I could not agree more with
this
 tendency and
this
 essay will show why
such
 measures can be beneficial not only for the local population, but
also
 for the firm itself. A facture often consumes resources from the venue it is installed. Most corporations consume huge amount of electrical power and, some of them can even pollute the environment where they are located.
For instance
, a metallurgical plant may consume millions of dollars in electrical energy each month and it is responsible for wasting metal detritus in the nature. To solve these issues, city authorities should encourage those businesses to invest in local well-being,
such
 as sports and social initiatives.
As a result
, the people who live in the neighbourhood would suffer less and have a better life. When the region where the venture is located passes through a development process, not only people will enjoy
this
 progress, but
also
 the company will usufruct from the benefits. Local development can reach all the businesses, since the place will become wealthier,
therefore
 leading to a reduction in prices in general, including taxes. To illustrate
this
 situation, we can a city in the countryside of Bahia: when Ford arrived there and invested in the city, there was an enhancement of people’s life conditions, following a rise in the profits of the company. If, rather than investing in local development, companies act aggressively, damaging nature and,
consequently
, local peoples' lifestyle, the results would be completely the opposite, leading to a hostile attitude towards the company. In conclusion, I personally believe that companies have a moral duty towards the community they are installed, and a good way to do it is by providing some improvement in the lives of local citizens,
such
 as encouraging sports practice and developing social amenities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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