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: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some opine challenging class environment should be emphasized among youngsters. Others think group discussion will prepare them as a better person when they pass adolescence.
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 competitive environment is necessary to achieve success in life, I personally believe that learning in a group will teach how be a team player and it will help to develop a higher level of thinking. On the one hand, some people believe their offsprings should always compete to achieve success in life. At the very young age, they try to hide their knowledge from other rivals because they have been taught that sharing valuable information with others may bring
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 position for them.
This
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 is a very essential point of learning how to become successful over their competitors.
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, in the contemporary education system the necessity of examinations is to identify who is the best and it creates a competition among students to achieve the
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 position.
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, the study has shown that too much pressure at the very young age creates problem among pupils who suffers from a variety of diseases in early childhood
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 as anxiety and stress.
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, there are some who think the co-operative education system builds any student a better person in life. Study with a team is always fun and it helps most students to understand the topic clearly. It is very common in students not to ask questions in the classroom, but they can discuss in a study session and gather the knowledge.
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, in medical science it is mandatory to have a group study session because it brings them how to be a team player when they will be working in a hospital.
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, persons who share knowledge with the fellow classmates become famous and it will help them to build friendship and may become a public speaker in the future. In conclusion, though early childhood competition is necessary for success, it is the cooperative education system helps in the professional career by achieving teamwork capabilities and influencing others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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