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Some people think it is better to spend and enjoy their money once they earn it. Others think it is better to save their money and enjoy it in the future . Which stand do you agree with and why ? Use specific reason and example to support your opinion.

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There is no doubt that there is indifference among people in ways of utilizing their incomes. While some believe in having fun and spending money rather than saving it, others argue it is better to save for
future
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the future
 and enjoy luxuries later. I
completely agrees
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completely agree
am completely agreeing
have completely agreed
 with the latter argument. Many believe in living in
present
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the present
, as
future
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the future
 is not ours to see.
Hence
, these
groupof
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groups of
group of
 people often spend their incomes without keeping it for later uses.
For instance
,
lot
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a lot
lots
 of young couples often take multiple trips abroad without having any future plans or savings unlike traditional ways
.
Accept space
.
This
 approach may result in huge loss to them in their financial crises
.
Accept space
.
However
,
lot
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a lot
lots
 of people do savings and investments in different ways which can be utilized in coming years
for
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in
 fulfilling their dreams.
Generally these
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Generally, these
group
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groups
 of people tend to have enough money to deal with unknown monitory emergencies. There is a common practice for saving at least 2% percent of income in various communities of
world
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the world
,
Accept space
,
 which can be used for difficult times.
Furthermore
, in India there have been
tradition
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a tradition
traditionally
traditional
 of saving gold and cash by the forefathers for
security
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the security
 of their coming generations. To conclude, everyone has various
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
 about ways of living their life and spending money and there is nothing wrong in spending wealth without saving, but I completely agree with the thought of savings and spending it in coming years.
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