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In many countries government spend a lot of money in improving internet access. Why is it happening? Do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?

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Ameliorating the
internet
 infrastructure by allotting astronomical proportion of the national budget is common in many nations, especially developed countries. Various causative factors are being held responsible for
this
 trend.
Although
 it seems an advantageous approach, I strongly hold a belief that it is not judicious decision to spend
such
 a huge amount of public funds on availing
internet
 access. It is easy to comprehend why
this
 investment is favoured by the regime of wealthier nations. The preponderant reason is that the availability of online network not only proves beneficial for individuals, but
also
 assists in the smooth functioning of the governments’ official
work
. If every citizen, whether he is working or non-working has the access of web, he would be updated with the vast information
such
 as current political scenario, weather updates and even he will be acquainted with his rights;
consequently
, accessibility of the
internet
 connection provides assistance to broaden the horizon of people.
Besides
, state incumbents give preference to keep the records of official
work
 online, replacing the manual
work
 which results in efficient management of the records.
Thus
, investing in the development of
internet
 facility is acknowledged to be a beneficial approach. Despite these benefits, I do not see eye to eye with
this
 proposal. There are many other pressing issues
such
 as poverty, educational sector, health care facilities, and employment which require immediate attention of authorities. Government needs to assign budget on providing the basic amenities to the underprivileged people in order to bolster the standard of the country. Who wants to access the
internet
 when he is dying because of scarcity of food? Conclusively, despite the fact, that investment of public grant for the improvement in the network connection is regarded as a boon in terms of spreading awareness and smooth execution of
work
, I firmly consider it as a squander of public money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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